Writing description that takes the cake
I'm currently proofing an audiobook manuscript, and it's already annoying for how much it uses food descriptions for skin color (mocha, caramel, chocolate, etc.)
But now a new character has walked in, and I have to say, this description takes the cake - I've never heard this one before!
*His skin is a warm tortilla hue*.
Like, what color even IS that?? Are "warm" and "tortilla" meant to match up and it's the toasted brown color you get when you heat a tortilla in a pan? Or is referring to that pale bleached color of the tortilla, that's somehow 'warm'? And if so, what does THAT even mean? Pale like that doesn't come in warm and cool versions!
Just had to laugh staring at that. How did this manuscript get published, let alone do well enough to be sent to an *audiobook* publisher?