Feedback - General stuff really, such as prose, pacing, sentence structure, flow, etc.

I'm just looking for some general feedback on the content in these screenshots. Want to know whether or not folks would enjoy it, why and why not, where one might stop reading, the strengths vs weakness of the material, etc. I will also soon be looking for beta readers for the finished product of this novel, so if anyone's interested, feel free to reply to this or DM me.

Either way, thank you in advance for your time.